Can you guys help me with this story?

Hey guys it's me again. I changed up the story a little, so if you guys wouldn't mind reading it, and giving me ideas of what will happen next I would really appreciate it. Thank you. Derek Henderson was a tall, muscular, good-looking, dark-complexion brother with brown eyes standing in a club called “Crypt Tonight” beside the bar drinking a Corona while waiting for his friends to arrive. Waiting for his friends, he saw this attractive woman with black hair sitting at a table with some of her friends talking and laughing having a good time. As he stood there, staring at her wondering if he has confidence to go over and introduce himself to her and her friends. She was short, skinny, five-five, weighing about one hundred thirty pounds, Carmel-complexion, black hair with brown eyes. As he stood there, staring at her wondering if he has confidence to go over and introduce himself to her and her friends. Two young ladies: one with brown hair wearing a Black Halter Dress, and her friend with brown hair wearing a Blue Flirty Dress walking up to the bar asking the bartender if they could get two Cosmo.